I saw this on the other thread, I only read 1-2 at that point but did like it. I'll give better feedback after I read the rest.

Yeah, I will add visuals. I have a theme for that, but need to do the proper set up which may take 1-2 chapters. After that it should be plenty of visuals.
Also I find the blog order irritating. I don;t know how to order the blogs properly.

I enjoyed it a lot, the oblivious thing is just fun and not really used much, especially in a serialized fashion.

Regarding feedback, I suppose the more obvious issue is the grammar and use of words, but that's something that will come with experience, it's not a big deal for your first story. As some other advice, while I love the "Oh it's just sunscreen" and other explanations, not everyone has to come up with a whacky excuse and, especially given the meekness of the protagonist, it seems like some (especially the bully types) would be fine just telling him to shut up and mind his own business.

I like where it's going though, a lot.

I like the initial setup, the mother doing what she is doing in regards to trying and help her son. That being said I though their were several weakness with the story.

First the parts where she try to play off the evidence of her sex came off a little bit to one the nose. I though it would have functioned better if that was a conversation she was having with someone while her son is around, a sort of we know the context that you don’t. With it being just between her and her son it came off like she was trying to get him to call bullshit.

Second I though that the use of photos helped in setting the scenes faster than if you had to resort to just pure words. The disadvantage is that there is not much else apart from the images to give someone reading it an idea of what the scene looks like. It kind of read like a script with a few visual aids.

Their isn’t a lot of stores that deal with the son being oblivious as most stores of this kind enjoy reveling in the son’s misery. Theirs also the issue of having to keep things from being so obvious or else the son looks like a barley functioning idiot.

It liked the start, but it hard to judge the overall story with just a start.

Can anyone post them chapters in order? Since its a blog it shows latest first and scrolling kind of ruins some parts.

My suggestion would be to copy the story/images into a word file, convert to PDF and post here.

Its more work but would allow you to post in chronological order.