Author Topic: 2 New Stories in the works  (Read 1888 times)

lohengrin30

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on: October 27, 2022, 11:49:04 AM
Hello,
I am currently writing two stories that will contain Mom/Bully content, as of now, there's not much content going on as I'm just building the characters and the world, if you want to read a long story with a lot of world building and character development, feel free to read my stories and give me your feedback.

P.S: I have chosen CHYOA as the site where i will be writing, i know a lot of you are reluctant to read anything from that site, rest assure my stories will be linear and no one will be able to add chapters.

Links:
https://chyoa.com/story/The-Last-Laugh.48485

https://chyoa.com/story/Atlasian.48543



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Reply #1 on: November 01, 2022, 06:56:04 PM
My main issue with that site is that stories end up unfinished. Part of that is by design, since authors are encouraged to keep adding to stories. But it's frustrating to read. Next biggest problem I have is the 2nd person narrative style that so much of their stuff has. I don't like to self-insert into a story. So if I see 'you you you' at the start, I don't even bother with it 99% of the time. I give 2nd person less of a chance than I give 1st person female, and I rarely read those.

Don't really have a problem with other authors adding to a story, unless they take it into a weird direction (oh no! now your girlfriend has a futa-dick!). The branching is kinda the whole point of that site though. If you're not making use of that, why even post it there?



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Reply #2 on: November 02, 2022, 09:02:16 PM
Hello, the ending to my first story, " The Last Laugh" is already written and set in stone, it's the part that we'll get there that i have to tweak and add along the way that will take time,  when i started this story i already had an ending and a begging in mind, the reason i do not let other people add chapters to my story, yet, as i have said, is because i want to follow my own narrative until i finish it, i too look forward to see what other people would add to my story and can't wait to see it, that's why i chosen that site in the first place, but for now.... it will only be what i will write. I also understand your point regarding the "you, you,you" this is my first time writing something like this and I'm quite inexperienced, honestly i didn't even expect more than a 100/200 views on it, i will take this in consideration going forward, thank you for the feedback!
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Reply #3 on: November 16, 2022, 07:14:48 PM
CHYOA has a problem from it's genesis, branching is encouraged and is a way to keep stories alive and add diversity so more people can enjoy and contribute to the story they like; You don't like how branch A is going? No problem, you have branch B to keep the content you like.

The problem with that is after a while the story get so many branching narratives that is impossible to keep track if the branch you are interested in is the one being updated (stories like Rulebook are a good example of that), the site could use some better handling of notifications.

That said, i think you should add different paths. The site is called Choose your own adventure for a reason, a strictly linear path end up being more frustrating then rewarding, sites like Literotica and Nifty are more fit for linear stories.