Author Topic: Any stories that are longer, with good pacing?  (Read 1461 times)

adamingleww

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on: January 22, 2023, 09:34:49 PM
As much as I love this fantasy, I find a lot of the stories in it are very rushed. It's only a slight exaggeration to say that, in half of these stories, it feels like the mother and son has a perfect, flawless relationship in paragraph one, then by paragraph three or four she's deepthroating his bully and doesn't care if her son lives or dies. I know everybody's in a rush to get to the good part, but this always feels so unrealistic and rushed to me that I don't find it hot. I'm not trying to be a hater, I realize these stories are being written for free, and I'm grateful to anyone who takes the time to publish, but I wonder if there are any stories out there that are slower, and take the time to focus on the psychological torment rather than just racing to the sex.

For me, the gold standard of the genre is still Soccer Mom and a Bully (https://www.hentai-foundry.com/stories/user/something1234/15184/Soccer-Mom-and-Bully.) which I think is basically a flawless story. Very well written, great pacing, very hot, and still packs a punch even after reading it many times. Cuckoldson's Conflicted and Watching My Mum Go Jack are up there too. If any of you guys were into those, and have similar recommendations, I'd love to hear them. Thanks!



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Reply #1 on: January 23, 2023, 07:27:53 AM
Check out Katie's Cravings by TheHumpMan on Literotica, its 9 parts and has an amazing start. Author got tired of the story so they wrap it up quick but still a well done story.

https://www.literotica.com/s/katies-craving



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Reply #2 on: January 23, 2023, 09:15:51 PM
As much as I love this fantasy, I find a lot of the stories in it are very rushed. It's only a slight exaggeration to say that, in half of these stories, it feels like the mother and son has a perfect, flawless relationship in paragraph one, then by paragraph three or four she's deepthroating his bully and doesn't care if her son lives or dies. I know everybody's in a rush to get to the good part, but this always feels so unrealistic and rushed to me that I don't find it hot. I'm not trying to be a hater, I realize these stories are being written for free, and I'm grateful to anyone who takes the time to publish, but I wonder if there are any stories out there that are slower, and take the time to focus on the psychological torment rather than just racing to the sex.

For me, the gold standard of the genre is still Soccer Mom and a Bully (https://www.hentai-foundry.com/stories/user/something1234/15184/Soccer-Mom-and-Bully.) which I think is basically a flawless story. Very well written, great pacing, very hot, and still packs a punch even after reading it many times. Cuckoldson's Conflicted and Watching My Mum Go Jack are up there too. If any of you guys were into those, and have similar recommendations, I'd love to hear them. Thanks!


You should check out this story I just commissioned from Usurpman.... https://www.hentai-foundry.com/stories/user/uspmn/62512/Tiffany-Goes-Back-To-College

It's over 12k words at the moment and just the beginning. 



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Reply #3 on: January 24, 2023, 04:31:38 PM
Check out Katie's Cravings by TheHumpMan on Literotica, its 9 parts and has an amazing start. Author got tired of the story so they wrap it up quick but still a well done story.

https://www.literotica.com/s/katies-craving

What happened to TheHumpman? I never see his writing anymore



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Reply #4 on: January 24, 2023, 06:14:46 PM
What happened to TheHumpman? I never see his writing anymore

Probably retired from writing, his output dropped towards the end and then put out like one story a couple years after and that was it.