Glad to know you guys have downloaded it and enjoyed, meant to wrap this up a while ago, as you can imagine. Particularly pleased to hear SnowStorm, you saying the pacing is right because that's something I really tried my best to do well throughout the story.
The pen name and book format were just for fun, I was curious how it would look if I took a standard book font, spacing, page size etc. Pleased to see it ended on 269 ;-). Not published for profit anywhere, I do this entirely for fun. It has however gone live on Literotica as of a few hours ago. The cover art was done from a guy from 2 forums ago, Fertamertoni. He and PrankyArt did a few illustrations for the story and I thought this one fit best for the cover.
Just to address a couple of other comments, I ended it with a 'teaser' because I wanted to really. I have had a rough idea for what could happen in 'Part 2' for many years, in fact, some of the ideas are quite detailed. However, as noted, I probably won't really ever get round to writing it if I'm honest, which I would say is also perfectly fine, because I do this for fun. I've asked for no money, no subscriptions, it's all own original work that I do in my spare time, so when it comes to 'instead of this' or 'I'd like to see that' I'd stress that it's a take it or leave it affair when it comes to the plot or how much I want to write. Critiques on the quality of the writing, the delivery of the story, etc, however are all very very welcome, I'm always looking to improve.
I do agree there is an abruptness to the ending, there were some story arcs that I wanted to play out a little more, e.g. having some fun during university interviews, and a big chunk on Leslie and Stuart messing around at her work. I also had an idea of Leslie joining Stuart camping with his friends, so that effectively everyone in their lives knew the truth and it was inevitable it had to come out. However, the work thread is the only one I really felt was a dangling thread - chapter 12 references it, but its a bit odd I agree to have built it up just to have it a throwaway line next chapter.
However, this was really what delayed the story so long. It added nothing to the story. Leslie and Stuart were already far too far down the line together to just have a clean break, she'd already compromised herself so many times she couldn't just look Lewis straight in the face and call herself a good mother. They'd already done sneaking around the workplace together, albeit after hours. Banging in a university campus toilets; that's just a reskin of the school toilets scene. I had a scene mostly written where she goes on a sexy date with him before his interview - it basically was a copy of the end of chapter 11, which considering it was the start of chapter 12 when this new scene happened, feels a bit deja vu.
I don't really know what chapter 11.5 means, other than being a different chapter 12, but I had enough ideas for chapter 13, 14, 15 and maybe more, but when it came to it, they didn't really add anything to the story.
The ending presented was one I had in my head for years and years, it was actually more that I'd crafted that in my mind first, and wanted to build a story that could 'believably' build to that moment. A few weeks ago I realised I'd already got there, and I just need to finish this and close it all off.
I still continue to write stuff for myself, but whether or not I finish the Jack story, I'm not sure, and I may write more short stories too.
As a thanks to you guys for reading my stories and feeding back over the years on this forum and its predecessors, I thought it only fair to wrap up the story and post it here first, however, the repeated posting of underage content and a lot of focus on mothers being drugged, tricked, forced, in some of the stories shared makes me uncomfortable. I'm unlikely to be engaging on this forum much as such, but I am available as cucksonwriter on Reddit, both for chats or PMs.
Have a look out on Literotica too for potential future stories, but no promises.
