Author Topic: Story Pimped out: Blackmailed (formerly heavy corruption)  (Read 2951 times)

gloveboy00

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This is a story based around the premise of a mom being tricked into becoming a prostitute by a female bully who her son has a crush on.

https://rentry.co/57eie


This story will be part 1 of a series revolving around the same characters. The series will get much darker and more degrader as it continues. Any suggestions for the direction it could go in are welcome.

warning this story and its series will contain drug abuse, blackmail, prositution, corruption, dubious consent.

Part 2: https://rentry.co/4k7a3pux

part 3: https://rentry.co/3kkc3i7r
« Last Edit: January 28, 2024, 02:22:28 AM by gloveboy00 »



veenaimo

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Reply #1 on: January 08, 2024, 02:06:25 AM
thats blackmail, not corruption



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Reply #2 on: January 08, 2024, 10:23:14 AM
you have ruined the story by putting female bully. it would have been lot better with male bully.



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Reply #3 on: January 08, 2024, 11:13:46 AM
you have ruined the story by putting female bully. it would have been lot better with male bully.
the piss drinker is absolutely right



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Reply #4 on: January 09, 2024, 07:30:15 PM
I liked the female bully, it's an interesting twist. But everyone's going to have their own kink, I'd prefer not to dive into the prostitution to teachers but that's just less of what I'm interested in. It was written well, introducing the teacher beforehand at the school meeting and everything.

The only real flaws I think were more grammar issues, proper names not being capitalized and punctuation being off. But the story is solid, maybe just try going over it and proofreading to fix up errors.



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Reply #5 on: January 18, 2024, 03:19:00 PM
Part 2 out now



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Reply #6 on: January 20, 2024, 10:26:30 AM
This is a story based around the premise of a mom being tricked into becoming a prostitute by a female bully who her son has a crush on.

https://rentry.co/57eie


This story will be part 1 of a series revolving around the same characters. The series will get much darker and more degrader as it continues. Any suggestions for the direction it could go in are welcome.

warning this story and its series will contain drug abuse, blackmail, prositution, corruption, dubious consent.

Part 2: https://rentry.co/4k7a3pux

The idea is really good and blackmail always works great for me but unfortunately I must agree with the others here, a female bully does not work for me. If she was teh girlfriend of the male bully and works together with him it would be good but as it is it somehow has not the same punch.



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Reply #7 on: January 20, 2024, 01:13:03 PM
The idea is really good and blackmail always works great for me but unfortunately I must agree with the others here, a female bully does not work for me. If she was teh girlfriend of the male bully and works together with him it would be good but as it is it somehow has not the same punch.

The boyfriend is a good idea, I'll try and incorporate it in part 3