Author Topic: Mom's Judo  (Read 6655 times)

BarronFields

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on: October 06, 2021, 12:56:11 AM
Hey guys, I wrote a story based on crazyboy2's post in the Real Life section titled "The real story without sex" that was about his experience going to judo with his mom. I put my own spin into it and changed a lot of stuff. I decided to make the main perpetrators to be the way they are because I found it more interesting if the main character was repulsed by and didn't approve of the ones doing those kinds of things to his mom. I felt that it gave the main character stronger emotions and reactions if he found them disgusting or a lesser human being, not the typical hot, greek god of bodybuilding, with a ten inch penis who every single girl they meet falls in love with them on first sight I often read in the stories.

I also opted to go with a slower approach, not just bumping uglies and falling in love from the first time they meet, but a slower corruption. I've written up to chapter 3 and got most of the character building out of the way and in my opinion (as the writer) it would start to pick up in chapter 4.

So without further adieu, i present to you Mom's Judo: https://www.pixiv.net/novel/show.php?id=16168215

p.s. it's currently being posted on pixiv because apparently you need an invitation to make an archiveofourown account.
p.p.s. I wrote this with permission from crazyboy2 so he knows I was doing this.



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Reply #1 on: October 06, 2021, 01:29:38 AM
Wow, very cool, it turned out something very unusual, I'm waiting for the continuation  ;)



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Reply #2 on: October 06, 2021, 02:01:58 AM
Really good stuff man keep at it. Maybe you could even do commissions in the future :D



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Reply #3 on: October 06, 2021, 08:21:39 AM
I'm glad you guys liked it.

It took me a long time to actually write the first three chapters, about ten days or so, since I was worried about the quality. I have an idea for chapter 4 already and it should be out next week at the latest but I'll try to get it done by Friday since I'll be busy this weekend.

Thank you guys for reading.



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Reply #4 on: October 07, 2021, 01:36:26 AM
It's really good, great amount of buildup and descriptions.



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Reply #5 on: October 07, 2021, 06:22:36 PM
How do you read it?



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Reply #6 on: October 08, 2021, 12:45:47 AM
keep up the good work dude!



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Reply #7 on: October 08, 2021, 06:27:45 PM
Can you upload the story here please?



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Reply #8 on: October 17, 2021, 08:15:58 AM
pls pls pls pls give the bullies huge cocks!



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Reply #9 on: October 17, 2021, 08:41:24 AM
pls pls pls pls give the bullies huge cocks!
I think there will be different guys there, in any case he should write the way that best suits the story.  ;)



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Reply #10 on: October 21, 2021, 07:01:54 AM
Very cool



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Reply #11 on: October 23, 2021, 02:55:49 AM
Brilliant! really loving this!



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Reply #12 on: November 02, 2021, 01:31:19 PM
Bro, waiting eagerly for next chapter



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Reply #13 on: November 12, 2021, 07:56:17 PM
The guy has a good potential, it would be quite possible to get a Patron, or create games on the Ren'py engine, gather like-minded people. I can give an example of AWAM, I recommend everyone to check it out. I just see it as a potentially good project if it is adapted correctly.