Author Topic: Mother and Bully Original Story Chapter Three  (Read 6724 times)

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on: October 10, 2021, 07:17:58 PM
Hey BFMM!

It's been a while since I shared the second chapter of an erotic story I've been working on, but chapter 3 is up and ready to go!  I hope some of you are still interested enough to give it a read, and maybe want to stick around to find out more about how Hannah and Rodney's adventure with the bully Dane goes.

Up front, I will say this chapter isn't necessarily my favorite. I took a long break from writing and came back to it recently, intending to pump out another chapter and get the wagon rolling again.  This one is shorter, less sexual, and more focused on the aftermath of the events of the first two chapters. Following chapters will return to the hyper-detailed sex scenes of earlier, but I think it's good to slow down and analyze how our characters are feeling after what just happened to them.

If you're interested to catch up with hot mom Hannah and our boy Rodney again, please give it a read and leave some feedback for me in the comments. I really want to know what you weirdos think of the story so far and how it's developed, and what you'd like to see happen in the future. I have a vague idea of how it will end, but there are many ways to get there.

Enjoy! And hopefully chapter 4 won't take as long.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1jWhPfA6IgoNnwYuSW4HoVpA3_56m931_yg99vTmG9CE/edit?usp=sharing



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Reply #1 on: October 11, 2021, 07:18:39 AM
I like the story. This last chapter is great too. I really like how stories show emotions, experiences, and dilemmas of the characters besides sex scenes. In my opinion, the most important thing in this kind of stories is to keep a balance. Then these two elements make a great cuck-son story. I am waiting impatiently for further parts.  :)





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Reply #2 on: October 11, 2021, 02:33:48 PM
Very well written! Even the last chapter. Keep it up!



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Reply #3 on: October 12, 2021, 12:40:54 PM
I like your story. You have a real good thing going.
The way you made the son know about the sex and you added blackmail to make things continue.
I'm looking forward to the rest of the story.
If only you could write 10 chapters a day  ;D



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Reply #4 on: October 13, 2021, 08:03:46 AM
Just finished reading it, amazing. Looking forward for the chapter 4.

I hope the wimp suffer a lot. Maybe they could snuff him with the mom help.



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Reply #5 on: October 13, 2021, 08:14:59 AM
I'm loving this story. My only real complaint is how quickly the mother was seduced, but it's not a big deal.



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Reply #6 on: October 19, 2021, 04:03:59 PM
Good story



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Reply #7 on: October 20, 2021, 12:16:10 AM
I'm loving this story. My only real complaint is how quickly the mother was seduced, but it's not a big deal.

That was an initial concern of mine.  I considered going back and adding a longer conversation and seduction scene, and I may return to that in the future, but for now I plan to just continue from where they are now.

It is a fairly brief encounter that leads to her submission.  The in-universe reason is that she's very weak-willed and suggestable, very liable to let herself be dominated, not to mention lonely and exceedingly sexually frustrated.  The real reason is that I was impatient to get to the more lurid details and didn't have as well conceived a plan for what happened that lead up to it.  Aside from that, I wasn't sure how much pre-sexual action and dialogue people would put up with before they either skipped ahead or quit reading.

I'm happy to hear any and all feedback and critiques you weirdos have.  Keep it coming, it can only improve the story for the future.



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Reply #8 on: October 20, 2021, 08:40:23 AM
For me, the more pre-sexual activities, grooming, resisting, etc. the better. I like long stories in which the mother is unavailable at first, resists for a long time and the bull is relentless and finally conquers her. I like how there is as much realism as possible in the stories.
But still, your story is great and I look forward to continuing. ;D



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Reply #9 on: October 21, 2021, 12:34:37 PM
I'm loving this story. My only real complaint is how quickly the mother was seduced, but it's not a big deal.

That was an initial concern of mine.  I considered going back and adding a longer conversation and seduction scene, and I may return to that in the future, but for now I plan to just continue from where they are now.

It is a fairly brief encounter that leads to her submission.  The in-universe reason is that she's very weak-willed and suggestable, very liable to let herself be dominated, not to mention lonely and exceedingly sexually frustrated.  The real reason is that I was impatient to get to the more lurid details and didn't have as well conceived a plan for what happened that lead up to it.  Aside from that, I wasn't sure how much pre-sexual action and dialogue people would put up with before they either skipped ahead or quit reading.

I'm happy to hear any and all feedback and critiques you weirdos have.  Keep it coming, it can only improve the story for the future.

I don't have a problem with how quick the mother is seduced. Why can't a man seduce a lonely woman this fast? Even after she learns he is her son's bully, she would feel guilty for sure, but he is giving her something she crave, dominance. It is fucked up how quick she succumbed and it's great

The story works as it is so please don't change it. The mother and son are weak and that's just the way it is. It is hot in its own way.

I also like when the mother is a challenge so why not write another story after this one? You could do something with more resistance and reluctance. Really built the sex up with more teasing.



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Reply #10 on: October 21, 2021, 02:49:02 PM
I really love this story. I would like it even more if you make the mother do cruel things to her son.

Mom may resist at first but with the bullys help she becomes more willing participant of her son's daily dose of bullying.




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Reply #11 on: October 22, 2021, 05:43:07 AM
Wow, this was really great. Honestly, chapter 3 was my favorite so far. My only small gripe was that the mom was converted slightly too fast, but honestly that can easily be fixed by having a time period of her completely regretting what she said and horrified with herself that she ever thought that. She can then be overly friendly with her son in her misguided attempt at redeeming herself (this makes the son also think that his mom just made a mistake and their relationship is better than ever) only to be completely corrupted again and falling much harder and in turn her son is that much more devastated.



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Reply #12 on: December 11, 2021, 11:53:20 PM
Waiting for the next chapter of this SUPERHOT story  ;D



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Reply #13 on: December 14, 2021, 09:09:31 AM
This is some of the best material I've read in a long time