Bully Fucks My Mom
GENERAL DISCUSSION => Fapping Materials => Topic started by: vanillacoke on December 27, 2023, 08:58:47 PM
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Something I conjured up in my free time. It's a sinister story about a Mother fucking her son's bully behind his back in his own bedroom. Might write a sequel later on if I'm bothered. Let me know your thoughts?
https://rentry.org/psaze
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very awful redundant
You made an account just to troll? Lmfao!
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Hey don't listen to that other guy. I honestly thought it was great. No time wasting build up. Just right to the action and lots of focus on the degradation and bullying aspect. I really hope you keep going and take the bullying even farther in the future. That's the part that really matters. I'm tired of every author trying to be the next tolkein with their elaborate storylines and BS. This is one of the better one's ive read.
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Very good for a first story
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Omg. This site is nasty and I am amazed at how an imagination can be so degenerate. I hate to admit it gets my juices going. Waiting for part 2
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great story bro. I look forward to more stories from you. But I would like you to develop the characters more and for everything to happen more calmly, for things to happen more slowly.
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hot story i like plz anal in part 2
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Overall, quite good. A few technical quibbles could easily be solved by a good proofreader. That would catch stuff like using 'things go worst' instead of 'things go worse' there near the beginning.
Thematically, not the greatest fan of the son & bully both seeming to be so immature. I'm not going to post the age that they seem like, but I will say that I doubt either of them are graduating high-school this year. Its one thing if the son is innocent and naive -that just makes him seem more pathetic. But the bully, in my opinion, should have come across as a man compared to the son. Every mention of him being a boy, or small, or anything like that simply took me out of the story until I 'fixed it' with a mental edit.
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This was really hot, hope to see more!
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so many white cocksuckers
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That story was amazing. God I hope in part 2 they keep doing obvious things and the son stays oblivious for quite a while. I loved how dark it got at the end there.I can't wait for more
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That was fucking awesome... you can give prequel on how mom ended up inviting bully to home.. and you can also do sequel ... waiting
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Fantastic story! Can't wait for part 2.
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any new her for part 2?
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Keep it up
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